at13oclock
7:29 p.m. - 2004-03-02
Username and title: at13oclock- angelfalen451. I love your username; it reminds me of the fairytale books I used to read as a young child. The title on the other hand I'm not so keen on, probably because it makes no sense. It does tie in with your layout though. (5/10)
First Impression: I have this layout on one of my personal diaries! I think it’s a very widely used template as I have seen a few people with it other than myself. (7/10)
Template: As I said, I also have this template, and the image to me is very 2 fold in meaning. One because the angel is falling, which is negative, but she has wings, so you know she can fly back to safety if she wanted to. Also it is not 100% clear that she is falling, she could well be flying upwards. That's how I had interpreted it anyway. I can see that in the “The girl“ section you have included your Imood, counter and Bio all in the same sentence. I like that you are saving space but it looks messy and unclear. I'm a big fan of dark templates, and it works well for you. (20/30)
Content: You are very critical of yourself, and in your latest entry “Birthdays”, of your past. I really like your p-o-y, its something I've never done myself, but really is what it says, a piece of you. Keep them up. You convey your feelings well, but you do daylog sometimes. This is more frequent at the beginning of your diary, and kind of fades out by the end. Some entries are reflective of the day events, and others are very reflective on you. I like this as i find it important to have a range of different style entries, so you know what style of writing you like best. You put the odd lyric in here or there too, which I like, but only because I do it myself. The only problem is that if it isn’t a well-known song then someone might wonder what the hell you are going on about. Some of your entries are also one line, which to me is a bit of a waste. You should create an entry just for random little sentences or thoughts.
In your bio your “about yourself” section is heart wrenching. I'm lucky to not have to deal with much of the problems that young people experience, and on the whole you show that you are capable of dealing with it. In conclusion, 99.9% entries are great; just some are either pointlessly short or very vague. Otherwise, i really like your style. Spelling and punctuation fine. (50/60)
Links: You have linked me. All your links work too. A rarity among many diaries. (10/10)
Stalkability: You have notes, email, guestbook, aim, map, and shoutbox. I think you have all you could there! (8/10)
Lasting Impression: Try to imagine you are reading a total stranger’s diary when you write, and that will help you be more informative. Some things you write do not make sense to others. (5/10)
Extras: A lot. I like the weather. Also, you have had A LOT of reviews! (5/5)
Will I come back? Sure, why not? (5/5)
Total- 114/150
Well done.
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