Brokenwords
8:35 p.m. - 2004-03-01
Username and title: Brokenwords- But we were broken and we didn't know it. I like these, although I don’t really understand the meaning. I think it ties in well with your diary as a whole. (8/10)
First Impression: This is my kind of Diary! You archive extremely well too. (10/10)
Template: The colour you used is lovely, I like that colour in general. I think the picture also ties in well with the themes of your diary. One criticism is that as your friend’s list is very long, you could put them all together on one separate entry and link back. The navigation is easy to use although as the colour of the links is very similar to the background colour it makes it a little hard to read. Credit to lisdesign, as it is simple, yet striking. I always like “random” buttons. (25/30)
Content: Your diary has many similarities to my own, except you have been writing yours since 2001. A lot of your diary is quite biographical; other entries are very surreal. If you compare your writing now to that of the first entries, you can see the changing style of writing, which is probably due to you maturing as a writer. Some entries are just one line, which don’t make a lot of sense to me, but maybe because they are specific to the particular goings on in your life. I like that you refer back to previous entries and in some cases another diary. It helps the reader to further understand what is going on. I think you are realistic, you can criticise yourself and actively recognise things, which you shouldn’t maybe have done. Like the OD entry. “But the past is just that. And I can't change it. All I can do is replay the events here, because even the bad memories are important to remember.”. I like this, it applies to a lot of people, not just yourself. When you talk about your friend Holly passing away I really felt your emotion. I have fortunately not had to deal with this myself and I thought you wrote about it well, and conveyed your emotion.
Sometimes you are funny; sometimes you are serious, sometimes both. I think you are a very talented writer and are good at what you do. Spelling, punctuation and grammar are fine. I have no criticisms, except that you should make your cast page more visible, as you refer to people around you often and it can get confusing. Other than that, well done! (55/60)
Links: You have linked me. All your links work too. (10/10)
Stalkability: You have notes, email, guestbook, aim. You could add others if you wanted. (8/10)
Lasting Impression: Please, for the love of humanity, don’t stop and deny people of your writing. (10/10)
Extras: A lot. Too many to list. (5/5)
Will I come back? 100%, but you already know that, I did beforehand. I had just never looked as far back. (5/5)
Total- 136/150
Good work!
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