Shi-ou-sama
11:06 a.m. - 2004-10-03
Username and title: %%diary-shi-ou-sama%%- The sound of her wings...- Your username sounds oriental? You need to explain the meaning here. The title is OK. (5/10)
First Impression: I can’t find anything. (0/10)
Template: Yuck, a film template, and a bad one at that. The images are confusing, as is the random use of colours. I do not like the way the text is slanted either. You seriously need to change this template as it is bringing the standard of your diary way down. The Links and Tests (?) are at the end of your friends. They need to come into sight otherwise they are lost. The only marks I can give for this is for the fact that you credit a designer. That is it. (2/30) Content: After the disaster of your template, I was expecting to follow suite here. But I was pleasantly surprised. Right from your first entries I was engaged and interesting. There is a very prominant feature of originality about you, and it intrigues me. There really isn’t anything more I can say, except maybe be a bit more clear as to who people are when you are talking about them. Enlist in a cast page perhaps, otherwise I am lost. Your spelling and Grammar are OK too. (60/60) Links: You need to clear this out immediately. It is full of dead links to sites that have long since closed, like Lavish review. You also have an abundance of broken links. I can see what the problem is. After http:// you put a space between that and the diary name. So instead of Http://dudetterevue... you write http:// dudetterevue. It will not work this way. You also need to organise them under headings, as most of them are very unclear as to what they are. You need to diferentiate between pending and complete reviews. (0/10) Extras: Tests and rings. Not enough by far. (1/5) Stalkability: All the essentials. (10/10) Lasting Impression: Your writing is very good. But the messy template and terrible links page just make me want to leave. If I feel this way, I guarantee any person stumbling in will feel the same. (2/10)
Will I come back? I don’t think so (0/5)
Do you have the Dudette factor? (Ungraded) No Total- 80/150
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